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Surrounded by evergreens
on a simple path of worn ground,
wind whispers by me
with gentle wandering hands.

From above the sun kisses my cheeks,
smoothes over my arms,
while pine needles crunch beneath my feet,
bare all this time and proudly wearing the dust of travel.

Just ahead there is a lake,
crystalline and calm,
where I find a large rock protruding from the water’s edge
more than large enough to make a proper seat.

The stone is almost too cool to the touch
but I embrace the sensation
and sink into it
to admire the mountains standing guard,
majestic protectors of this fantastic serenity.

Face upturned and eyes closed,
I breathe in deep
the heady, soothing mixture of forest,
earth,
and water.
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Author's Comments

I might add more to this at a later date (the last stanza doesn't feel quite final/conclusive enough to me) but for now, enjoy :D

Also I chose the title with the idea of "inspiration" referring to breathing.

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:iconcsnyder:
you paint a lovely picture with words my friend
:iconpokey-the-great:
Thank you so much! :heart:

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:iconkersee9:
makes me feel like i'm there :)

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"aya agowadv adonvdo ditlilastanuhi dakanogidv" me
i mean "i see spirit (soul, heart) music" yeah that.
:iconpokey-the-great:
Excellent! :D

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the ending is a bit off. But I did enjoy this. I can totally picture it. I'm really tempted to take this, and put it in prose with MUCH more detail xD

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:bow:

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:iconpokey-the-great:
My feelings exactly. I think it maybe needs a couple more stanzas.

Thanks so much! I won't be offended if you decide to try your hand at a piece of prose providing at least some sort of credit is given :D

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